So i wrote this thing but it's not completely finished yet. Some feedback please? Much appreciated?

It's a very nice and succinct description, but it makes me wonder as to the point. Is it a biology essay? I think that we need to go backward a bit and simplify before our human inadequacies topple our technological achievements. We DON'T realize how wonderful, magical, and fleeting life can be; agreed. But it's an internal struggle to overcome our minds, not the world around us IMHO.